please evaluate my essay i hav gre in 2 days

[salmankhan_7860]

There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that people seeking longer and healthier lives should consider moving to small communities.Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument stating that the people in small town promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities support the following .Though the argument initially seems compatible,on close examination has some logical flaws in it.The author gives the following reasons namely, Buisness town of leeville reports fewer days of sick leaves than the workers in the nearby large city of masonton,the town of leeville has only on physician compared to that masonton city which reportedly has five times more phisicians,the average age of leeville is significantly higher than those living in masonton city.The following reasons has many logiacal falws that the author didnt provide the information about
beginning with the sick leaves of workers in leeville less compared to that of workers in maston city,The author doesnt not provide the reasons of the sick leaves in his augument.The sick days could have been applied by workers in masonton city for job trails,conference meeting and as wells as attending large scale workshops where the worker is perfectly alright and is not affected by the hectic work which the author seems to claim
secondly,The no of physicians in leeville compared to that of maston city,The physicians in leville and the phisicians may be working on weekdays as well as the holidays and if they are working on all week days why are the people taking more sick day in masonton city which the author has missed in his factors that support his aurgement .
thirdly is the amount of work done,the work shift timings, by leville and the masonton city workers comparetively same or there or is there any difference in their productivity this asspect the author fails to provide information .
finally the average age of leeville being more comapred to those of maston city, are all the people included in this survey are is it limited to only a certain no of workers only,are there other factors that affect the average age of these workers
summing up all these above factors the augment would have seemed more logical if the author must have provided the information on them too.

[tommywallach]

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