mclaren7 Wrote:Dear moderators,
Would option D be correct if not for the part "there was"? --> should be "there were"?
For discussion purposes, would option D be correct if the answer starts with "there were"?
I figured the subject of the topic involves places (major cities and homes), thus the usage of "there" would be appropriate?
Thanks
Lee
no, choice d still has major issues.
- 'there were' / 'there was' is a very common construction in
spoken english, but its use in formal written language (such as the language of the gmat) is ordinarily restricted to discussion of the physical location of things (as in, those things literally
were there, etc.) if it's not being used in this sense, it's considered wordy, because it can be replaced by more concise phrasing.
additionally, you only use this construction when you are actually
asserting the presence of something/someone (where it is not already obvious). for instance, if you start a sentence with 'there are two cars in the street...', you're assuming that your reader does
not already know that there are tow cars in the street. otherwise, you'd start with something like '
the two cars in the street are...'
example:
there were less than 1 percent of homes with electricity
this is bad. first of all, we aren't using the sentence to assert the presence of the homes - they're already understood to be there. (also, it's not really clear where 'there' is.) second, we can easily rephrase this to 'less than 1% of homes had electricity', which is much nicer and more concise.
- 'having' is used incorrectly. if you use a participle like this, you're introducing an
adverb modifier, which modifies the
action of the preceding clause. unfortunately, the main action word of the preceding clause is 'was' (from 'there was'), so the modifier doesn't make sense. even if you are generous enough to let the modifier modify 'had electricity', it still doesn't make sense (as the modifier doesn't give the way in which the houses had electricity).