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A clause with 3 parallel nouns parallel to another clause

by rahulajith86 Tue Oct 16, 2012 1:30 am

Hi Stacy / Tim ,

I was going through the video answers of your SC answer explanations from the OG.

If you Look at Q. 134 - SC - OG 13

134. Recently implemented...


(A) fatigue among shift workers,
(B)fatigue among shift workers,
(C) and fatigue among shift workers
(D) lowered fatigue among shift
(E) and fatigue among shift workers


I chose Answer A - Because I found 'and have raise production' to be parallel with 'have reduced sickness'.

The below was my reasoning for A and Why can't it be this way:-
'Have reduced sickness, sleeping, fatigue' (3 items parallel)
',and have raised Production ...' ( parallel with the whole clause above- esp because there is a ,and )

I know this is the wrong answer and i am convinced with the actual answer. BUT ,hypothetically, if above were the intended structure, how would it be re-written correctly.

Thanks
Rahul
(Btw- Amazing job - Stacy and Tim . Sentence correction was a weakness for me. After your going through your explanations, it has become my strength)
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Re: A clause with 3 parallel nouns parallel to another clause

by tim Thu Oct 18, 2012 1:50 am

OG is a banned source; it is illegal to post OG questions anywhere on the web. If you are in one of our classes, please ask OG questions during office hours or before/after class..

also please note that Sentence Correction is not about "correction" at all. your job is to identify mistakes. asking questions along the lines of "how would i correct this" is not a good way to get better at SC. again, focus on mistakes..

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Re: A clause with 3 parallel nouns parallel to another clause

by rahulajith86 Fri Oct 19, 2012 12:20 am

Tim,

I did not post the entire question nor are the answer choices complete. I posted it following the guidelines prescribed and in the exact way MGMAT's OG archer posted it.

When I solve problems I do try to eliminate wrong answer choices. I just wanted to know the right construction for that sentence so that if i encounter such a construction, i would be better prepared to handle it

Rahul
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Re: A clause with 3 parallel nouns parallel to another clause

by Willy Fri Oct 19, 2012 2:00 am

rahulajith86 Wrote:Hi Stacy / Tim ,

I was going through the video answers of your SC answer explanations from the OG.

If you Look at Q. 134 - SC - OG 13

134. Recently implemented...


(A) fatigue among shift workers,
(B)fatigue among shift workers,
(C) and fatigue among shift workers
(D) lowered fatigue among shift
(E) and fatigue among shift workers


I chose Answer A - Because I found 'and have raise production' to be parallel with 'have reduced sickness'.

The below was my reasoning for A and Why can't it be this way:-
'Have reduced sickness, sleeping, fatigue' (3 items parallel)
',and have raised Production ...' ( parallel with the whole clause above- esp because there is a ,and )

I know this is the wrong answer and i am convinced with the actual answer. BUT ,hypothetically, if above were the intended structure, how would it be re-written correctly.


If I get you right, please let me explain a bit

'Have reduced sickness, sleeping, fatigue' --- these 3 can't be a list of 3 items because we need COMMA + AND before the final item. So, these can't be list of 3 parallel items.

And if you are saying

'Have reduced sickness, sleeping, fatigue ,and have raised Production ...' --- is the list of 4 items. Even then it would be wrong to add HAVE in the final item of the list and it would still be not parallel.
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Re: A clause with 3 parallel nouns parallel to another clause

by tim Thu Oct 25, 2012 1:25 am

just because something shows up on OG Archer in a password protected section of our website does not mean it can be publicly posted for the world to see. our forum rules are clear; please take note of them. as for turning SC errors into correct sentences, i maintain that your job should be to find errors, not correct them. you will encounter much more success if you focus on what's important..
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